“Brianna wait for me!” yelled Zachary, Brianna waited for Zachary and looked up at the stunning view. Zachary catched up with Brianna and walked to the cliff because it’s where you get the nicest view. As they were walking,Zachary and Brianna heard a little girl yell “Help!” near the cliff.
They ran to the cliff as fast as possible and saw a girl holding a ginormous balloon taking off with the balloon. Zachary and Brianna thinked quickly and took both of her legs and pulled them back to the cliff.
“Thank you so much for saving my life!” The little girl said. “No worries there were other kids doing something similar then DIED” Zachary trying to scare the little girl.”Im not dumb those are just rumours” The little girl said angrily.
Brianna laughed at Zachary and elbowed him “ow Brianna!”. The little girl offered them to watch the view with her and come for dinner at her house later. Brianna and Zachary agreed and watched the gazing galaxy view.
They talked about what the real world was like. The real world was called “earth” but their ancestors were working with a famous legend called Buzz Lightyear. So they are stuck forever in a world far from the real world. One day Zachary and Brianna wanted to go and build a ship and save all the people and go to earth.
The little girl had a spring green watch that lets her know when it’s dinner time or call her parents when it’s an emergency. Her watch was buzzing and it said “Dinner time!”. The little girl told Zachary and Brianna it was dinner time so they walked to the little girl’s house. Their eyes were amazed by how big the little girl’s house is.
The parents came to open the door for them and welcomed them with a generous smile and greeting. When we reached the diner table, Brianna and Zachary jaw dropped. The little girl forgot to tell her name and said “Oh by the way my name is Naomi and I’m 11 years old!”. Zachary was only 2 years older than Naomi and was surprised because they thought she was 7 years old.
They all sat and butchers came and served us a big chicken with cheesy onion on top, with gravy that melted in your mouth and potatoes surrounding the chicken. Everyone dug in and had the best dinner in the world!
For writing, Mr.Bell taught us this trick called “lifting a line” It’s about taking a sentence from a story you have made and using it as a start of your new story. It made huge differences and changed my story more interesting.